The Keep – Flash #2

15 Feb

Here is another Flash. The prompt for this flash was a first line provided by another member of my writer’s group. The prompt was: “The cat tensed and then leapt…”

The hunting cat tensed and then leapt for Yursi’s throat. Yursi dodged but the agility of the cat allowed one paw to swat Yursi on the back as it flew past. The additional momentum threw Yursi to the ground. Before she could come to her knees, the cat was on her.

One paw on her chest and one on her right arm effective pinned Yursi underneath the one hundred and fifty pound animal. The cat bared its fangs and hissed as only a cat can. Its fetid breath made Yursi gag which spoiled the spell that was on her lips. Yursi struggled to force the cat off but it was too strong. The cat’s gapping jaws reached toward Yursi’s face. Yursi closed her eyes as she could not imagine this would be her death.

The rough tongue started at Yursi’s chin and, in one long lick, covered her face with cat drool. Yursi opened her eyes. The cat still pinned her in place but it seemed to be smiling.

     “That’s enough.”

     The voice sounded frail yet the cat obediently moved off Yursi and walked a few strides away. It then sat down and began grooming itself.

     Yursi rolled to her feet and looked around for the source of the voice. Leaning against the trunk of a large oak tree was an old man about Yursi’s height. Thin grey hair covered his head and his angular jaw had grey stubble.  A curved pipe was clamped between his lips and a column of blue-grey smoke curled lazily up into the tree branches above.


Posted by on February 15, 2012 in Short Stories


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6 responses to “The Keep – Flash #2

  1. kathils

    February 15, 2012 at 11:13 am

    I like it! Very well done. Is it going to be the beginning of something bigger . . .

    • Dennis Langley

      February 15, 2012 at 1:25 pm

      I think so. I have been working on several small scenes and these two flashes that I think will fit together into either a nice short story.

  2. yhosby

    February 27, 2012 at 8:56 pm

    Hey Dennis,
    I enjoyed this one too. I’m already scared of dogs, now you’ll have me fearing cats too LOL. It seems like Yursi keeps finding herself in trouble; she has more bad luck than I do.

    Keep smiling,

    • Dennis Langley

      February 27, 2012 at 9:01 pm

      Yes, she does tends to bring it on herself. Thanks for your comments.

  3. Tony Grygelko

    April 9, 2012 at 6:34 pm

    I love this character Yursi!

    • Dennis Langley

      April 9, 2012 at 6:45 pm

      Thanks, Tony.

      There is more coming soon with this character. The more I write with her the more I liek her too.



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